Kind of spooky in the week GHOST hit 666 reviews in the UK, but a few things on CULLEN book two – DEVIL IN THE DETAIL.
If you’ve bought it, you should have received an email from Amazon yesterday saying a revised version was uploaded. This is fact. There’s also a revised version of GHOST IN THE MACHINE uploaded as well.
What sort of revisions? Well, one of the big things I’ve done this year is edit the first two novels so the writing is consistent with the later novels – my style has moved on a lot. With GHOST and DEVIL, I went through them several times and tidied the text up significantly. The changes were read by Rhona, who edited DYED IN THE WOOL and BOTTLENECK, and those two books are now as good as I can make them without starting again from scratch (seriously, don’t tempt me).
The bulk of the changes are stylistic – removing info dumps (bad), heavily-reducing the Scottish patois (no kens, didnaes and all that), cutting Bain’s swearing a bit (he’s still a profane idiot), heavily-reducing the dialogue attribution (I was a bit worried about people getting lost in dialogue, so every line had a said) and tidying up a few bits and pieces.¬†There was a lot of descriptions of roads which really added nothing to the books – I should really write THE ED JAMES GUIDE TO THE SCOTTISH MOTORWAY SYSTEM (INCLUDING DUAL CARRIAGEWAYS AND SIGNIFICANT A-ROADS).
The significant changes to GHOST were the complete rewrite of the first scene and addition of a cold open scene in Pilrig Park, foreshadowing a bit of the ending. Nothing major, really. The word count went from 96,000 to just under 87k.
DEVIL was squashed into two calendar days and I’ve thinned the action on day two out into a third one, adding a nice scene with Sharon McNeill. There’s also a bit of a ticking clock¬†that was in there which I’ve picked out of the mix and made more explicit. At least two of the scenes got really major rewrites. The word count was sliced from 103k to just over 86k and it is a lot slicker for it.
I don’t know if any of your ever have any plans to re-read the books (I think TRAINSPOTTING and THE CROW ROAD are the only novels I’ve read more than once…), then do me a favour and read these ones. Spending that amount of time putting sheen on a free book was a labour of love, really.
In other news, DEVIL is now out on Kobo and Nook. I’m experimenting with non-Amazon channels for the Cullens just now (I’ve had >30,000 GHOST downloads on these two) but I’ve been a bit underwhelmed by sales so far, shall we say. Say what you want about Amazon, their KDP offering for indies like me is second-to-none.
— Ed
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11 Responses

  1. I have re-read books by a few authors (you included) Will finish the one I’m reading at the moment then go back to your first two.

  2. Hi, I’ve read your first two again. The new scenes added to both books are great, particularly Devil in Detail where Cullen is affected by his investigations and realises maybe he isn’t the hardened detective he thinks he should be. Nice to see a bit of vulnerability in him.
    I think your revisions have made both books even better reads (and I really thought they couldn’t be improved and had given 5 star reviews), without losing any of the storyline/plot. Would like to see a bit more of Sharon McNeill in next one maybe ?

    1. Strangely enough, I just uploaded the revised FIRE IN THE BLOOD which is a significant change. Added a couple of Sharon scenes and expanded her appearances… Should be able to download the new file, otherwise fire me an email. Ed

      1. Checked on amazon, looks like file not available yet. Will check in a couple of days. Thanks for update Ed.

  3. Am I right to assume it takes Amazon a few days to confirm your revisions to Fire in the Blood, and then I can get the revised book ?

          1. Have got revised book now, Amazon very helpful with online chat and sent it me straightaway. Thanks.

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